Undecided Soul

[julialovesgiraffes]

I don't want to think of it that way... I just like not feeling so crazy, knowing I'm not the only one who feels that way.

[PoeticSuicide]

Lol. That works too.

[PoeticSuicide]

Bump

[sexiebrittney123]

I really like this poem...although it is really long, one thing I learned in my creative writing class is to try and say more in as little as you can...I like how this poem shows how your feeling, I can kind of relate...I sometimes have dark feelings to. KEEP WRITING...THIS IS REALLY GOOD.

[abuturky]

انزع حبيبي معطف السفر
وابق معي حتى نهايات العمر
ماذا أنا لو كنت لاتحبني؟
ستصبح الأيام لا طعم لها
وتصبح الحقول لا لون لها
وتصبح الأشكال لا شكل لها
ابق بقربي دائما كي يورق الشجر
ابق بقربي دائما كي يهطل المطر
ابق بقربي دائما كي تطلع الوردة من قلب حجر!

لـ سلمان العودة , من كتاب " طفولة قلب "

[cherray]

you are honestly very good!
reading from your experiences has made me feel like i'm not alone.
good job!

[PoeticSuicide]

I really like this poem...although it is really long, one thing I learned in my creative writing class is to try and say more in as little as you can...I like how this poem shows how your feeling, I can kind of relate...I sometimes have dark feelings to. KEEP WRITING...THIS IS REALLY GOOD.

Which poem?

[EricaInTheSkyWithDiamonds]

Stereotypical emo poetry. Bland, no substance.
I think you might benefit from the words of a real, published poet:
"Razors pain you;
Rivers are damp;
Acids stain you;
And drugs cause cramp.
Guns aren't lawful;
Nooses give;
Gas smells awful;
You might as well live." - Dorothy Parker

o_O Profound. Now, go cut yourself...

[PoeticSuicide]

Stereotypical emo poetry. Bland, no substance.
I think you might benefit from the words of a real, published poet:
"Razors pain you;
Rivers are damp;
Acids stain you;
And drugs cause cramp.
Guns aren't lawful;
Nooses give;
Gas smells awful;
You might as well live." - Dorothy Parker

o_O Profound. Now, go cut yourself...

Will do, but first I'd love for you to demonstrate how it's done on yourself.

[J3anny]

I LOVE ALL OF YOUR POEMS CAN YOU MESSAGE ME SOME MORE OF THEM WHEN YOU THINK OF THEM. PLZ AND THANKS

[PoeticSuicide]

I LOVE ALL OF YOUR POEMS CAN YOU MESSAGE ME SOME MORE OF THEM WHEN YOU THINK OF THEM. PLZ AND THANKS

No problem.

[somebitchnameddeltrese]

wow. more cliche depressing angsty poems.
0/10
Next.

[Owlz]

[Hattie16]

Just wanted to say that I like your poetry. I used to write poetry on suicide, but I don't anymore, I found that it only made me more depressed. You are a good writer though (:

[Kafta]

Wow. You are amazing.

[PoeticSuicide]

Thank you all for your kindness

[PoeticSuicide]

It will run thoroughly through your vein,
A cold blue substance so simple to obtain
It pumps fast to your heart, to your brain
It feels so good that it’s driving you insane
How did you start this?
How will it end?
In hells abyss or by godsend?
One must tread lightly on the path they choose
No other man can tell them how to live
You can be high on crack, drunk on booze
But a man is a man and must find his own way back
From the shock, from the horror
Back from his demise
From his pain and his pleasure
He must come to realize

[PoeticSuicide]

Does anyone have any thoughts on where I should take this poem?

[PoeticSuicide]

Or a possible title?

[PoeticSuicide]

I'm in a writing mood! Give me poem a suggestion and I'll write one for it.