I'll post some of mine, but ... theyre not 'nice'

[LiVeNlEtDiE]

No title.. suggestions? ( i've written maybe 3 poems about feelings for someone ever. These aren't as nice..) This is one, I'll post some more if the reaction isn't so bad.

here comes the night, says the child clenching her bear.
'go away' she thinks, trying to escape his terrifying stare.
He rises to his feet and walks slowly over toward her.
Insuing fear into the girl, he smiles 'come here baby sister'.
Paralyzed with fear she tries to rise.
He stops towering over her, staring straight into her eyes.
'where's mom' she whispers, as she attempts to slide away.

'why do you do this to me'? she says, but he doesn't know what to say.
This makes the boy mad, 'shut up' he kicks her with all his weight.
'you're worthless kid'.
It hurts.. but she doesn't let herself cry.
Crying shows you're weak, she thought it was a rule to live by.
It was better this way, if she cried it would last longer.
She screamed once, even though she knew no one could help her.

He laughed quietly, and left her there.
She lay there thinking.. she wished she would die..no one would care.
She slept on the cold floor that night..bleeding.. waiting.
Her mom never came, once again she had a tantrum and began screaming.
'God, why don't you let me die' she says over and over in her head.
Thoughts flooded her mind, as she gave up on trying to get to bed.
This is the end, she's giving up.

[Breathe In Bleed Out]

nice..like it..post s'more

[Stiu1ator]

Crying shows you're weak

thats rather like my thinking actually....always best to be frozen, and inpenetrable.

[Sparki]

That's awesome!

[LiVeNlEtDiE]

thanks.

[Lost-Conscience]

:thumbup: Very good.

[LiVeNlEtDiE]

.... okay, okay I just wanted to use the smileys... <-- I just like that lil guy.

[Lisa]

awh too sad well written though..

[LiVeNlEtDiE]

[Chacotay]

good, but one question, is it about incest or physical abuse?

[LiVeNlEtDiE]

physical abuse. I've never written about sexual abuse, or incest.

[Chacotay]

i'm sorry to read that, its got to be painful...

[demonic_smurf]

It was sad but I thought that it had really good rythm.


:accident: demonic_smurf:accident:

[OnlyGonnaEverBeMyself]

Sounds awesome. I love stuff like that.