All for the sake of healing.
She went back on everything she stood for
Fell apart to the Acts that she harbors
A night of regrets Finish a lie with "I love You"
What a heartless thing to do In the hands of another
Who have you Become?
Stranger
I taste the poison on your lips eating through me it kills
Slowly breaking down months of strength
And memories We built together
So high, so strong You single handedly destroyed everything we ever were
Everything we were to become A false commitment, I so strongly believed
Pretending you were someone you never were meant to be
You've gone to far
There Is no going back...
Declare your independence
I should've listened
I was warned of the pain you'd Cause
I knew what you were capable of
Blame me.
Blame me for trying
Who have you become? Stranger
I taste their poison on your lips Eating through me it kills
Slowly breaking down months of strength and memories we built together
So high, so strong You single handedly destroyed everything we ever were Everything we were to become..

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Yeah, yeah, she still counts the minutes
That I am not there, I swear I didn't mean
For it to feel like this
And don't fly fast. Oh, pilot can you help me?
Can you make this last? This plane is all I got
So keep it steady, now
Cause every inch you see is bruised

4 views and no replies?? guess it really does suck..

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Yeah, yeah, she still counts the minutes
That I am not there, I swear I didn't mean
For it to feel like this
And don't fly fast. Oh, pilot can you help me?
Can you make this last? This plane is all I got
So keep it steady, now
Cause every inch you see is bruised

Its not that bad...
Just such a common topic..
And not a real good steady rhythm.
But I like the words and atleast you use proper spelling
If I were to rate it it would be 6/10

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Looks like a big list... try breaking it up a bit.

it was good, just a little hard to follow because its all in one big block, if you slpit it up, it would be MUCH better.

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its sure a sad poem but u were clear about ur feelings in this poem

cool any more comments?

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Yeah, yeah, she still counts the minutes
That I am not there, I swear I didn't mean
For it to feel like this
And don't fly fast. Oh, pilot can you help me?
Can you make this last? This plane is all I got
So keep it steady, now
Cause every inch you see is bruised

I liked it. A lot. Like a 8/10. I think it's perfect the way it is. I wrote one very similar to it, but on a different topic. I posted it on here. Like I said. It's really good.
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Cliched topic, but original way of looking at it. It was a little depressing to read-or maybe to actually digest-but very good use of imagery and word choice.

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wow

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ok yea so im starting an anti-emo club, want in?

I loved it. Made me want to cry.

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REad this one too

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More, eh?

Nice how you wrote this song, too.

http://www.lyricstime.com/keepsake-t...ry-lyrics.html

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