my friend, Jamisha, is writing a paper for english..she needs a thesis

its a pic of superman on a got milk pic and this is all she wrote...

Children love to eat foods that are good to them instead of good for them. Parents may use different techniques such as punishment, the way a food looks after it is prepared, for example making cornbread look like pound cake, the name of a food, for example using the term candy yams instead of sweet potatoes, or using role models such as super heroes to get kids to eat healthy. Advertising companies are very familiar with the last technique.

i told her that it's too wordy..should only be one statement (not too broad and should answer the question "so, what?"
i gave her examples of thesis from my english papers:

ex. a] Although .....(fill in blank here)......, Immigration is a vital element for both the financial and spiritual well being of the United States.

ex. b] Although scholars will disagree on many elements of immigration, they agree that it is a vital element for both the financial and spiritual well being of the United States.

any suggetions?????

Why doesn't she focus on the milks content instead?

Why Calcium deficiency is partially responsible for the decline in American education?

Why more and more water and other chemicals are being added to our milk, reducing its nutritional content?

What ever happened to pure milk?

lol

rough ideas sorry, I have never know anyone that has completed a thesis on super man and a carton of milk.


p.s

What she has so far is really boring.

It doesn't flow well at all, I can see the angle she is going for. But I would scrap it.

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I agree...

Haha, "my friend".

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her writing sucks her thesis sucks

she should quit english

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Through the use of positive propoganda, kids may be swayed to eat healthy food as opposed to ________ food, causing _________ and ________ to rise/fall among the population

first ______ is cause I couldnt think of a word for junk food
other _____ are for you to fill in depending on what benefits your focusing on

you know what?? I feel horrible..we're just now finishing. I had her to create an outline and GAVE her a thesis when she finished:


The ads, for "got milk," purposely use popular superheroes and superstars as the face of their ads to encourage kids to drink milk.

point made lol. she should be fine, thanks all