I made a few changes with the punctuation in this poem because I didn't really like how it was before. What do you all think of this one?


Rain drenched,
i saw you, happy.
Our treasure-
this has become.
I smile and think of that first night...
My fear subsided with the calm
of clashing thunderclouds
that came
with drops the size of dimes.
the water stirred-
tumultuous,
torrential.
But my heart felt safe...
in the shelter of your arms.
Protected from the world,
from everything,
from me.
And now...
I am reminded when I see you once again.
Soaked head to toe,
blissfully saturated,
concentrated-
everywhere.
You...concentrating,
on the moment.
Just like always.
Living your life
to
the
fullest.
Most memorable...
cherishing the rain.

excellent use of punctuation. im impressed :)




ps: told ya so.

I'm glad you liked it. ;) Thanks for responding.