Before you read this you should know, it's not about me. Just something funny I wrote and if you don't like dirty/erotic poems don't bother to read it

With everyone, I go to bed.
To everyone, I give head.
I wish I was dead.
You think I chose this life?
Hell no.
You think I like being a ho?
My clothes are short and tight.
I walk the streets day and night.
My pimp watches, from under a street light.
You think I don't know what I do is wrong?
I hate prancing around in this shiny thong.
you think I like sucking ding dong?
It doesn't matter if it's small or long.
I help people get laid.
As long as I get paid.
I wish I could start my life over.
I need more then a four leaf clover.
To get a buck,
I have to suck
or f***.
When I don't bring money,
my pimp get's mad.
Love is something I never had.
I need a nice vato,
who doesn't expect constant gato.
What if I have and STD?
You'll never know till you slept with me.
I put out everywhere,
even at the fair.
Wherever I go women glare
with hate.
Cuz I'm their man's playmate.
I hate being a hoe,
but theres no other way to go.
I was such a fool,
I couldn't finish schoo.
I broke every rule.
I tell the men,
"it's the biggest I ever seen."
When I really think
"it's the size of a bean."
So come on unzip your jeans.
I been doin this since I was a teen.
I know what I'm doing,
when I'm screwing.

it's just ok. it wasn't lol funny but pretty amusing. i think if the stanzas were closer in syllables i would have enjoyed it more cause when u have a hard time reading poetry it takes away from it's impact.
also the rhyme sceme was a little off at times, but don't get me wrong i enjoyed the creativity. very creative. thanks for sharing, hope my comments didn't hurt ur feelings just tellin what i thought. write more for me to read and comment on

thanx for the feed back and it didn't hurt my feelings.
I like your poem about paradise

constructional criticism is good but sometimes comments get misconstrued on this site. i don't want anyone to ever be offended by replies cause posting what u write about is like posting ur emotions or thoughts that are important to u. so i just don't ever want to knock someone down. thanks for ur compliment on paradise.

this really good you have chosen a real life example to base it on and used real life meaning and up to dater ones :dirtymag: