How can you expekt me to love when all i know is hate...Whas the point of virginity when at 15 ive been raped...Yea it hurts, but im too high to give a ****...Im too high too keep my life in touch, so ****an what...Lemme load up the clips cuase [DADDY's GOTTA GUN]...Ima smile on like'a good kid cuase [BABY's GOTTA GUN]...COME **** WITH ME, I dare you to touch me...The only thing i want out of life is for you try & hug me...You'll see what happens when im on cats end...You'll feel this hot pain tearing you apart just like when you put ya dick in...In otherwords **** YOU...i thought i could trust you & love you...You see what love'll do...I'll make your secret spot bleed too...I put my faith in you hopen you'd help me find myself...How does it feel to know i hate you more then hate itself...Its pouring outside & it still doesn't measure up to the drops from my eyes...This is the sound a dove make when it cries, the last chirp it makes when it dies...

Brilliant song(?) It just really got to me; it's so sad. I love any well written piece exploding with strong emotions. I don't have any suggestions for you; I think it is fine the way it is. (aside from puncuation, but it's not a big deal :) )

ALL IM GONNA SAY IS GREAT JOB*CLAPING*

THANKS, I WISH MORE PEOPLE WOULD ACTUALY READ MY STUFF

Your title: Fellatio*

About song: Not such good start, but nice ending.

Naw, its Felatio...its sumthin a lil diffrent then Fellatio...Just like its watermellon...a lil diffrent then watermelon...if ya knew me ya'd understand...lol

BTW thank you for the feedback...any suggestions 2 a better opening???

thats really good :)