Be an athlete,
be the star,
keep on smiling,
you'll go far,
Sing with feeling,
Play your best,
Keep on working,
Never rest,
Try your hardest,
Act too smart,
Don't get down,
or show your heart,
Never faulter,
Never feel,
Close yourself up,
It's for real,
Never love,
Stay alone,
Smile, laugh,
but don't be shown,
for heaven forbid,
your not what we want you to be.

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I like the rhymth of that poemit kinda makes me reflect on my life alittlegood job, but the last line would sound better if it rhymed

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Originally posted by Julioly
but the last line would sound better if it rhymed

I agree, but it was good nevertheless...

Awesome rhythm....I like the style. And I like the topic. And I like the last line. lol I think the last line stands out more because it doesn't rhyme so I don't think you should change it.

i love it... it just flows so well.. my fav part is...
"Never love,
Stay alone,
Smile, laugh,
but don't be shown, "... i just love it.....

I really like this. I liked that last line too. Good job!!!