not too sure on this....feedback will be MUCH appreciated!

The pain I feel
Like a knot twisted inside.
The love I feel I lack
Like a hole burned in my heart.
The hatred directed toward me I feel
Like my breaths are halted.
The depression inside me I feel
Like a giant cloud over my head, pressing me down.
The quietness I show to all, feels
Like inside a scream wanting out.
The front I put, so people will like me,
Is like a bird caged...wanting to be free.