Hearing birds singing in the trees
I know that I am free.
Seeing the beautiful colors around me
I know that I am free.
Smelling the garden' fresh scent that's to be
I know that I am free.
Tasting a delicious hot dog and watching people agree
I know that I am free.
Feeling my last breath escape as I float away
I know that I am free.


-*~i'm not quite sure on this one yet....please give me some feedback on what you think!~*-

Rhyme schemes never have to be perfect, but one thing I noticed was that you kept a practically flawless rhyme scheme up until the line ending in "away," which disrupted the natural flow of the poem. The "watching people agree" phrase seems lengthy, that also messes with the progression of it.

Aside from those minor errors, I thought it was all right. Basic, to the point, nicely worded. I wouldn't call it spectacular, but it was a very nice piece :D

I wasn't sure on what to put for tasting....writing this I had basically been trying to find somethings for the five senses....and tasting...i could only think of food at the time i was writing it.
And I didn't even try for rhyme scheme, so to see that it kinda played out...that's cool! :D
anyways, thanks for your replies!