its a long one, but i like it...so gimme some feedback! any criticism is helpful!


The Little Triumphs

The clock keeps ticking
-sand through the hourglass- as
my life slips away.

"Why don't you take things more seriously?
Life is not a game!"
the buzzing in my ears
echoes endlessly.

Another day another failure:
"comes unprepared to class"
how is it that this 90 minutes
can keep me worrying
all day long?

Oh no, "I done ****ed up"
yet again.
I barely notice except for the hassle
of convincing you im sorry,
of convincing you i care.

"Why won't you just try?
You have such potential?"
Mother the Nursemaid pleads.
"Lazy bastard. Do you even
care about what your mother's
going through?"
Father the enforcer, chiming in again.

"It's 6:15, get up already!"
the Alarmist yells from below,
why can't today just
be a saturday?

Not enough sleep
to keep me strong (enough)
Not enough free time
to do what i want to (nothing)

"What do you do all day?
Just eat, sleep and screw around!
Take some responsibility!"
I care for no one but myself,
I understand, at last.

It's wrong to want,
wrong to care-too much or too little.
Life is an unending blend of gray
and every day is just a (slightly) different shade
-sand through the hourglass- as
my life slips away.

shit when i read that i was like, wait a minute did i post this? my mom just kicked my out to live with my dad in pennsylvania because i didnt take responsibility and was always ****ing up. next year i will be a 3rd yr freshman. that ****in sux!! but practically the worst part is that my dad has been in and out of my life since i was 2. he didnt talk to me for 4 yrs straight after giving me the best christmas of my life. and the only reason he ever called again was because he heard i tried to kill myself. and now the only people he seems to care about is himself and his girlfriend (only because he gets free bud off her) and her lil bitch daughter. im staying with my uncle right now bc no one wants me.

it's a good poem, it really goes with my life, seriously. I hate things like that, but they think they know and they don't......i wish you had better things going for you........it's a really good poem seriously