I can't stand your punk rock clique
you fashion punks all make me so sick
its not about safety pins and patches
or purposely starting phyisical clashes.
Its none of the things that you think
that's why both you and the preps stink.
None of you will ever understand what punk rock is
its about being yourself and living the way you want to live.

I don't care if you listen to all the local bands and Nofx too.
I'm not like you because I won't conform I will be true.
Hot Topic is not for me.
They just attribute to punk rocks dying degree.
I refuse to support Blink 182
because to me they aren't much different then JaRule.
I don't understand all these so called punk kids
they are conforming to an image.
They've missed the point completely.

good..im not into rock...but this kinda makes me wanna find out what the hell Nofx is!

Nofx is one of the best punk bands to ever exist. I love their music. If you are going to look into punk music also check out the ramones they started it all.

While this poem gets its message across very effectively (and I commend you for that), to give some honest criticism it just doesn't flow. The rhyme scheme was interrupted several times: patches/clashes, is/live, 182/JaRule, kids/image...none of those actually rhymed. This would have been okay, but pieces work better when you either make everything rhyme, or just let it be free verse. The second aspect which interrupted the flow, more so than the rhyming troubles, was the syllable usage. Rather than looking at the poem as a whole and working to make it go together, it seemed more like you wrote each sentence individually and then just threw them together, without considering how it would sound when you actually read it.

But despite this, the fact is that I agree with your poem's message, and I think that the unrefined, non-poetic qualities of it made it all the more gritty and true. The poem was a cry against posers and conformists, and in a manner the non-conventional aspects of your poem were a cry against conformity in and of themselves. So, good job, I liked it overall.

:music:..i wanna be sedated (sp):music:


**R.I.P Joey Ramone**

good poem. I understand what you mean by it, but i would just like to point out that its hard just to by anyone or anything. Everyone just wants so fit in, so if some ppl fit in in the main stream punk croud then thats good for them and thats hard enough just to do that. I don't want to insult you or your pukieness, but if you were realy being yours the whole time then you wouldn't care so much about other peoples socil placement. At leat i think so, but its just a speculation.

Unicorn dream I agree with you it isn't a very technically sound poem and I agree with all of your criticisms. I guess my poetry most of the time doesn't go along with a certain rhyme scheme or pattern although sometimes I try. I just kind of write whatever comes out. Thanks for getting the message though, and Shady Chick thanks for respecting Joey. The Ramones are great.

Originally posted by SOADfan4LIFE!!!
I don't want to insult you or your pukieness, but if you were realy being yours the whole time then .

pukieness...lmfao, I just totally busted out laughing when I read that part...hehe...Anyways, I liked the poem and I think you got your message across really well.