ANOTHER DAY
He lives a life of solitude
He lives his life in vain
He lives his life wishing
He could take away his pain
Guilt ridden and sick
Sorrow fills his eyes
Happiness, never felt
Demons tell him lies
He tries to hide his pain
By living inside his mind
But its hard to hid the truth
When on his arms its lined
Each scar has its own story
Each scar shows his pain
Each scar shows his struggle
For his sanity he tries to gain
Alone at night he cries
So no one can see his face
Takes the knife on his dresser
And believes he's such a disgrace
Another day he will wake
And see the cuts on his arm
Puts his head in his hands and cries
Because he never really meant any true harm
Another scar added
Another piece of his sanity taken away
Another feeling of guilt.
To add to another day

~Crystal~

hey thanx Amaya~i thought so too. Your' probably think the part where i say: Another day he will wake
And see the cuts on his arm
Puts his head in his hands and cries
Because he never really meant any true harm
That would be a verse that really bugged me cause it didn't sound right. thanx for your comment!
Crystal

I loved the poem, I can relate. The rhythm was awkward at times though, like with this verse which you mentioned:
"Another day he will wake
And see the cuts on his arm
Puts his head in his hands and cries
Because he never really meant any true harm"
Perhaps it would be less choppy if you changed it to something along the lines of this:
"Another day he will wake
And see the cuts on his arm
Put his head in his hands and cry
For he really meant no harm"
That was just a thought. And saying "For his sanity he tries to gain" seems kind of weird...should the "his" be changed to "the?" I don't mean to sound nitpicky, but constructive criticism can help. And really, the only things stopping this poem from being a truly great work are small problems in the grammar and flow of it. All of those could be fixed with some syllable revision. Aside from that, it conveys all of the emotions and struggles of self-mutilation with raw poignancy. Another good poem from you, keep it up!

That was a really nice peom you wrote. I liked it a lot. It has much feeling within it and I think that many people can relate to it. I for one know the pain in which to described within your poem. It is a very difficult feeling and it just tairs your heart apart. You just feel like you are going to die, but your still within your body after death. You feel like your soul is rotting with your body. I only with that people can understand when someone feels with emotion. Very difficult to understand.
I thought it was a really nice peom and I hope to read so more.
See you around.:)