Fought

This is stupid,
why do i even care?
when all along all i've wanted,
was just to have you there.

Your next to me but ,
yet you seem so far away.
where are you when i can see you clear as day.

so many things have changed now,
and i can't understand.
but even though you haven't been here long,
i feel i'd die without your hand.

so why are you so near me,
but yet you seem so far away.
you hold me close into the night,
and your soul it seems to fray.

i wonder why it's happeneing,
where your going inside your mind.
i know inside you cry of pain,
but there is nothing i can heal to find.

your wounds are scars that have been opened,
i can't sew them back if you allow me not.
but let me in and you will see,
you'll recieve for all you've fought.

It started out pretty good, had nice rhythm. I think the last stanza was a bit off than the rest of the poem, it seemed like you may have been rushing to end it. The line "you'll recieve for all you've fought" is a bit confusing, you may want to expand on it more.

Nice poem though. ;)

If you were the person this was written for you would understand but i see how this would confuse you.

Thanks for your comment.

I just wrote this as a response to another poem, but do these words convey true feelings? This seems very generic, which isn't necessarily bad. In my day, I wrote many generic poems. It's a good way to deal with feelings, if they're true, and to feel like you're a part of something wonderful like creativity through emotions. I just wonder if things expressed in these poems actually happen to people, or if they just write them for a good rhyme.

They are happening right now. I just got back from talking to my boyfriend at his break. So i had to get feelings out.

So yes there are feelings...obviously.

i feel like i say this to too many people..

it tried too hard to rhyme and the topic was non-original and boring