my friend & I are attempting to write a song; this is what we have so far:
(idc if you think it's bad; we were just messing around)

I stand and stare in the mirror,
I know things aren't always as they appear
I want to achieve all my dreams
I just have to believe


I wanna get out, show everyone what I'm all about
I wanna stand out, and let the whole world know
I wanna speak out, shout out, about what I see
No matter what, I know who I can be...
Anything.

No one knows you the way you know yourself
Stay that way; don't be anybody else
Keep your head held high,
Don't let life just pass you by



.,,,that's all we have so far. We have like five more songs too :P
Let us know what you think :]

Looks good to me. ;)

Looks good to me. ;)

thanks :]

Its probably my bad english... but I can't get the verses to connect, - to me it seems like they could/should be for 2 or 3 songs, instead of one.??

No it's not; part of the first isn't done& the second isn't done either, aha.
...which is whyyy...it's not completed :P

....but thanks for that; it helps us :]

Bumped. Tell Me what you think please

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Sucks balls. Go eat some acid.

Awe thanks darling!
...but if your going to insult something; do it correctly please so it actually seems insulting. Cause yours just made me laugh.

Overall, uninspiring. If it's a song, it can maybe get away with it. Lord knows, most music doesn't have strong lyrics, at least the modern stuff (think about it, it's mostly true.)

Finish it, refine it, and ask again.

Awe thanks darling!
...but if your going to insult something; do it correctly please so it actually seems insulting. Cause yours just made me laugh.

I don't think polska was insulting you; she was just giving you advice.

Not bad.