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SoulStalker
03-20-2009, 12:09 PM
As i lie awake in bed pictures of you in my head everything i did that day how nothing went my way the voices that were being raised not even being fazed how the empty feeling grows in me making sure that no one will see how the tears swell in my eyes trying to cover up with lies the faces that flash in my mind the feelings which put me behind which shuve me so much further away from pure happiness everyday for what I feel is nothing new and sad as it is theres nothing I can do accept feel the pain upon my flesh it makes me new its like a refresh yet I know it is something I must not do something unsafe from others view hopefully soon when one night arrives I wont sit and wish for knives I wont feel like an empty black hole I will have back my soul and I will go to bed without a second thought like it was the only thing I was ever taught...

NightViper
03-20-2009, 04:17 PM
This is nice but are you a girl or a boy?

christina999
03-21-2009, 07:45 AM
i actually love that. its relly beautiful

SoulStalker
03-23-2009, 12:19 PM
This is nice but are you a girl or a boy?

you know me don`t you ? Yes I m a girl and your worst nightmare

Johanne17
03-23-2009, 01:24 PM
Its outstanding!

jannahs
03-23-2009, 01:56 PM
hi my reah namesis shanekwa

NightViper
03-23-2009, 10:57 PM
you know me don`t you ? Yes I m a girl and your worst nightmare

yeah right but now I m free!!! :D

AwesomeDuck
03-23-2009, 11:18 PM
I don't think it flows good at all.
Could've used some punctuation or line breaks...

Also, I think it's a total overkill of strong imagery and emotion evoking words, it just all sort've blurs into "meaningful" garble.