An empty endless sigh fills my heart
I long for his demise
The black shadow of his wings vanquished
The endless nights of pain
The tears she never cries
Vultures shall consume my friend no more
For I am by her side
Together we shall end it
His reign shall soon be fallen
Agonizing sadism ends with his demise
Fighting for her soul
Soothing tender wounds
Open they fester
The blackness eating
Endless nights flying backward
Skirmishing kindred
No kindness here to be found

It sounds pretty good that one does! ...but again I don't understand it.

An empty endless sigh fills my heart
I feel for my friend in a way most would never understand unless they'd been in the same position
I long for his demise
I want to kill her father
The black shadow of his wings vanquished
He's making her life hell wtih violence and mind games
The endless nights of pain
The tears she never cries
she's alone in her family because they refuse to listen to her...she feels no love from them
Vultures shall consume my friend no more
the wish to die is the vulture
For I am by her side
Together we shall end it
basicly its saying that i'll help her through anything i can
His reign shall soon be fallen
Agonizing sadism ends with his demise
he beats her....nuff said
Fighting for her soul
Soothing tender wounds
Open they fester
The blackness eating
Endless nights flying backward
Skirmishing kindred
No kindness here to be found
That's all about the wish to die and being inside that type of mind, knowing those thoughts

I think you should make it more obvious who 'he' 'she' and 'I' are in the poem, and what the situation is.....unless it's meant to be obvious already? I dunno.

you already kind of know the situtation, this is in responce to fiona last night, she called me wanting to die

Oh right :(

I though it was about Fiona. You should show her that poem, or perhaps write her a special poem. It might help her realise that's she's not alone in this.

wow1 thats good :D

thanks, and i e-mailed it to her :)