Hiya.

So, I was originally given an assignment by my english teacher to write a poem, and it became based on something that was quite close to my heart. I realise the 5th stanza is a bit odd, but thats really just how it turned out. Any opinions on it will be greatly appreciated.

Number 11

Look bright
Your days of eternal numb
Long gone are the days
You sewed and sung

Twice down that road
You did stroll
With your spirit
And with your soul

Fearfully,
You did return one
Though not from the path
So painful, so long

Hands tied we stare helplessly
At the chair you sat on
As your beautiful spirit
Faded, faded, and then was gone

Tears stream
Through the path down which you strolled
They dry where it ends

For now you are safe
You are untouchable
You are numb

It was like, mediocre for me, until that last stanza where I was like whoa! I don't know what exactly, but that's my favorite part.

Anyways, some punctuations might be nice. Commas, periods, whatever. I got a bit frazzled with the lack thereof. But overall it was nice enough =]

Woops on the lack on punctuation, my bad.

Dry.