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number1_freak
07-07-2008, 08:01 PM
Fed to me like fairy tales
without a happy ending
Lies told to me I thought had truth
without remorse ever given

One side of fallen love
the other only of deception
Tricked into letting you have
what i had never given

My body that I tried
to save for someone special
Like a thief you stole it
and kept only for you pleasures

Even though lies filled me with joy
they left tremendous pain
It might not be that easy
for me to ever trust again

but despite what you have done
I will find me another
who really loves me
and will be with me forever.

quietdawn
07-07-2008, 09:24 PM
this poem was beautiful it made me cry
its really good and has a lot of emotion in it
i just wish my poems had some kind of sense like urs did

jmadhot
07-09-2008, 01:21 AM
that was good

blackgeek21
07-09-2008, 02:30 PM
very good. mine never reach such emotion. wats it about? my guess is rape(dont no why but thats wat it sounds like)

number1_freak
07-09-2008, 03:31 PM
very good. mine never reach such emotion. wats it about? my guess is rape(dont no why but thats wat it sounds like)

not so much really rape its like goin wit a girl or boy just to have sex with them

Lolita666
07-09-2008, 04:07 PM
its fucking amazing.!