puppet of the dark

A role of the dice,
The flip of a switch
It can all change, it can all twist
Into a life of darkness and pain,
A voice in my head says hold onto thought,
Of a life worth living.

A world of joy ripped from the heart,
No light and no hope
Just wish on a star,
For the tears to stop rolling
A ray of a smile
But it’s only a shimmer of light.

Find me hiding,
With tear streaked cheeks
In my dark corner, my home
The darkness seeping into my soul
My master, my commander, my puppeteer
A slave of the darkness the misery the fear.

It's too dark for my liking, though I like how it delves so deep. And I like some of its poetic quality. Perhaps you could adjust the syllables to make the poem more united. Keep writing!
IDOMAD

thanks if you want i will right a not so dark one
but that isnt normally what i right so would be challenging as to what else you said it didnt undersatand a word of it

i like it, its like somethng i'd written a few years ago

thanks if you want i will right a not so dark one
but that isnt normally what i right so would be challenging as to what else you said it didnt undersatand a word of it

sorry. translation- I didn't like what you wrote, but I liked how you wrote it. However you might be able to make it flow better by playing with the syllables.

thanks if you want i will right a not so dark one
but that isnt normally what i right so would be challenging as to what else you said it didnt undersatand a word of it

and I'd like to read some of your other writings.

I like how it delves so deep. And I like some of its poetic quality.
IDOMAD

it is a complament so thank you it was just somthing i made up quickly non of my poems really flow, making them flow doesnt really fit into the mood but thanks for your coments

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