"I am Jack's love."

I hear you speak to me,
and I understand us.
I want you to hate me,
but you love me so.
But to hear you say it,
it hurts way more.
I can't understand why,
it's nothing I can save.

This is love, (Love me like a sex crime.)
make me hurt like I want.
I swear to god, (I want to be raped by you.)
I want to bleed out your name.

Anyone can see me now,
I'll be open to the world.
I love the way this feels,
it's something I can't help.
Drink your coffee darling,
I love your serious face.
Come over in the car,
we never thought this through.

This is love, (Love me like a sex crime.)
make me hurt like I want.
I swear to god, (I want to be raped by you.)
I want to bleed out your name.
I can feel you, (Love me like a sex crime.)
shiver for me angel.
I swear to god, (I want to be raped by you.)
I'm not through with you yet.

o0o0o!

Hmmm...I'm not sure.

"But to hear you say it,
it hurts way more."
I think you should refrase that, since you repeat the word it and "way more" sounds pretty 5th grade.

"This is love, (Love me like a sex crime.)
make me hurt like I want.
I swear to god, (I want to be raped by you.)
I want to bleed out your name."

I liked the chorus...but the "I want to be raped by you" line just made me laugh. I think it's one of those things you actualy have to hear to really understand the emotions conveyed...if that makes any sense. :/

"Drink your coffee darling,
I love your serious face."
That's a great line. It sounds like something I would say or write.

Good job. :)

is the title inspired by Fight Club?

Yes ma'am.

In my old band, I always had to write vocals with rhyme schemes, because I played bass, so I had to sing along with the rythem.

But now, in this new band, I do straight vocals, so I'm kind of experimenting with lyrics untill I find something that I'm comfortable with.