its the middle of the night
im reaching to hold you tight
trying to pretend it was there
when it never was

so now im here
like a fool all alone
wishing i had something
that i never did own

begging for forgivnace over the phone
crying into my pillow about how far we've grown
and the minutes between us quickly fade to years
and multiply with the drop of every tear

to hug you one more time
i'd give anything in this world
being stupid was my only crime
and your only crime was not knowing mine

and now this life has passed us by
too bad it is and always has been based on a lie

It doesn't suck at all, but it could use some tweaking. You spelled "forgiveness" wrong, but we all make mistakes sometimes. Also please capitalize "I" and use apostrophes when needed (like when you say its, it should be it's, if you're talking about "it is".) Other than that though, I thought it was pretty good.

Originally posted by drillteam04

being stupid was my only crime
and your only crime was not knowing mine


I loved those lines, it's very true for most relationships. Great job, but I agree that it needs some tweaking for the flow.

man.. i wanted to fix forgiveness. o well. =) I liked it. had emotion.

its very good, but once again im confused about the its always been based on a lie part.

lol...yep i spelled forgiveness wrong didnt i...lol