mmk i was feeling crazy in love about 6 months ago with my boyfriend that i decided to write some lyrics about him. its soooooo cheesy and crap, i was just falling head over heels and didnt know what to do with myself. i still havent found the perfect tune for them haha but im working on it! so i guess for now its just a poem... anyways i thought it was pretty cute and kind of good for a serious amateur, what do you guys think????

it feels the wind came rushing by
for i couldnt notice the subtle breezes
that came from inside
so can it be
the soft expressions upon his face
the gentle touch and warmth
but still i must pace
or can it be

you never know, gotta take the plunge into
what used to be so unknown but now fully explored
i wonder for its too late
to turn around and be like before

the hard earth that i once stood on
becomes a pillow for us to rest
forever linger on
oh let it be
the commitment of one and one
it never felt this real as i know it does now
the happiness we won
will it be

I feel it cant go on without you is nothing at all
the thought of solitude in this life
though just a mere flicker
one day will be man and wife

a heart to touch as it reaches mine
your the breath of air that feeds my spirit
our union will stand through time
but can it be
yours is the only soul i ever could trust in
so if you have nothing else remember these words

I Love You, Justin.

it is.

comment!!

grr 12 views and nobody has anything to say?? im getting pissed >=[

pretty good stuff

pretty bad

that was pretty intense... very very good.
I especially liked the last stanza, i'd say 8/10

hehe thank you! i dunno if anybody noticed cuz i did it on purpose but the only part of the whole poem with punctuation is the last 2 lines

What made you write it? or inspired it...?

i was just falling soooo deeply in love with Justin and i dunno, it just kind of came out haha i was thinking about him and started writing stuff down and thats what it turned into. i really wanna make it a song but i just cant seem to find the right melody for it..

you write songs as well... cool cool
that seems like it'd be hard to turn into a song

it got better as it progressed. the last few stanzas were good :] thumbs up!

im sure it all made sense to u :eek2:

well obviously its mosty metaphors lol but its not exactly that confusing... have u read poetry before?

bumpppp

nobody??