This needs a lot more work, but I'm interested in the rhythm. Let me know what you think- you're RESPECT and input is appreciated. Sorry if the language is somewhat offensive to some of you.


I only fight when I’m naked and confused,
a slight hand
a slight stagger
he only fought back with sober movement.
then we talked while we fucked,
we never said anything mean
Only ambiguous
'cause it gets us off to gossip---
It’s not okay to fuck people you don't like.
it’s not okay to fuck people you don’t trust.
But I’ve fucked out of hate,
And I’ve fucked out of like,
And I’m fuck out of trust;
we've always been equal
because we fuck.
We all want to be equal
and if we are, who will teach us?
So we’ll never be equal
Because we’ll never be older

It's not bad. It isn't my favorite style, but the poem has decent voice.