Hey please can you leave comments on this and im currently missing a bridge bit so if anyone has any ideas please feel free to suggest :-)

If you could see how far I’ve come
I hope you’re pleased with what you’ve done
I lost my mind you saw me crack
You took my soul and felt me snap

The knife cuts deep
And tears each vain
Cuts through the ties
Can’t feel this way
You’ve seen my scars
And felt my pain
You changed my world
I’m not the same

You made me cry made my thoughts swirl
You took my breath you stole my world
But now your gone I’ll take it back
I see things straight you cant take that

The knife cuts deep
And tears each vain
Cuts through the ties
Can’t feel this way
You’ve seen my scars
And felt my pain
You changed my world
I’m not the same





The knife cuts deep
And tears each vain
Cuts through the ties
Can’t feel this way
You’ve seen my scars
And felt my pain
You changed my world
I’m not the same

overdramatic.

Well yeah but then again a lot of songs are hardly accurate portraits of peoples lives are they lol? Anyone else have anything to add?

Well yeah but then again a lot of songs are hardly accurate portraits of peoples lives are they lol? Anyone else have anything to add?

good songs are.

not all the time

why be mediocre?

Why Not, (i really have no answer for you thats why im just saying the opposite to you, well not really opposite but im sure you get what i mean)

Not in a mean way that i have no answer i just cant think of what to say but i like to have the last word mwohahahahaha

okay.

NOOOOOOOOOOO honestly i wont be able to rest until you stop

=P

:rofl:

I liked it

Yay

itz real good

I think that it's cliche. You need more original work in there. For example, your line "The knife cuts deep, And tears each vain, Cuts through the ties, Can’t feel this way ", has been said by so many songwriters. Look for the deeper meaning in what you're trying to say. Look up some synonyms and adjectives and it'll help you to create a stronger tone. Don't settle for easy words, it can ruin a great song.

The best line in the whole song is, "You’ve seen my scars, And felt my pain". It has more feeling to it than many of the other lines.

Thanks :-)