this is a song i am still working on and its not done quite yet.
i would really appreciate it if you told me what you think.
thx much=]



I'll turn on the porch light

and wait for you tonight

anticipation is killing me

but i know what your bringing me..


softly now,

i dont want them to hear us,

alone now,

god this feels so right,

couldnt be more right,

couldnt be more high,

on your love..


were wrapped up in our own world,

with the sky pitchblack and endless,

the warmest i have ever felt,

underneath a blanket.

our bodies, are like vines.

your legs, rapped around mines,

we are closer than close

and it feels so right,

couldnt feel more right

couldnt feel more high,

on your love...

Has potential but it's full of spelling errors so some people may not take it as seriously.

thx, i appreciate your honesty =]

Has potential but it's full of spelling errors so some people may not take it as seriously.

this ^^
the problem with this is that it can't really develop more than it is now
so incredibly short song?


ps. have a look at my poem? it's on this same board

tru.i guess ur right.thx

please change spelling mistakes
anticipation not intisipation etc