this is my worst poem plz criticum is welcome !!

RUNNING AWAY
she heard the music start
would she regret the day of her wedding ?
if she ran now would someone see her?
suddenly all her past bruises seemed to return
and she ran
she ran from the past nights of hurt
and from the future of hurt
tears stung her eyes
and suddenly all the nights of screaming and violence
caught up to her
her shoe fell
she hit the ground with a shreik
and she didnt get up
she didnt have a reason to

and suddenly all the nights of screaming and violence
caught up to her
>> this and after lines the poem falls apart. I thought before i got to this line it was a well written poem. HOpe I helped!

actually that time it didnt help

all i got to say is least i was honest and didnt give you a load of crap on what i thought. if you cant take critism then dont post. Sorry i couldnt help you out. but if your happy with how you had wrote it than keep it you'll be the one reading it in a few years not me.

i wasnt being mean it is just the lat time u posted on my poetry thread u helped but this time it didnt :)

omg im sorry. but it just how you worded it.. Really Sorry. ill look over it again sometime and try and help.

I think it would have been better if it contained more, but never the less, good job.