One girl
Dress in black
Walks down the street
With her clothes so dark
She stares into people’s eyes
To see if that can heal
Trying to forget the cuts on her body
Made by herself
To ease the pain

She runs swiftly
Watching the time
Trying to get home
Not to be late
Thinking bout what her father might say
Or what he might do
Getting home on time
Sigh of relief as she creeps to her room

But there’s her father sitting
With a fist at hand
He has read her journal
Calling her a liar
As he gives her another bruise
To add to her collection
On her porcelain skin

Midnight on the clock
Flashlight on in her room
She softly writing in her journal
Blood dripping on the pages
Salty water from her eyes
As she writes her final words
“Tonight I’m going to die”

Now she rests 6ft under
With a stone at head
With a note clenched in her hand
Saying, “Now I’m happy
In heaven I don’t weep
I’m happy my scars have faded
All is forgotten
Those horrible memories
Are just mere dreams ”

oh that is very sad, but it is very good. 1 suggestion though?
"One girl
Dress in black
Walks down the street
With her clothes so dark
She stares into people’s eyes
To see if that can heal the pain
Trying to forget the cuts on her body
Made by herself
To ease the pain"
i think it could sound better if you changed "To ease the pain" to get rid of the 2nd pain. But thats all i have. Keep writing!

o0o very nice...question though...if we commit suicide do we go to heaven or hell? i've been wondering about it for some time...but no one would really know would they....?

Thanks lots, anymore comments?

i think it's a good poem..but, it would sound better if you take littlestupidgirl's advice..it would just flow better

Thanks

I loved it! It had meaning...i love poemswith meaning and emortion

damn, all i can say is that was amazing writting. I really like your work!

Thanks

that is really good

Thanks