In midnight dreams of madness
I rest my thoughts on you
The chaos begins to falter
And all bad fades

In day dream state of mind
I wonder how we've made it this far
You've got me in your palms
Hold my heart tenderly

In my midnight dreams of madness
As we lay in separate lives
You've held my heart to yours
Love is such a complex thing
Just remember who I am in the morning

not bad, not great.

What should I work on?

i think itr would be good if you put "we lay in our seprate lives holding my heart to yours.." something like that but if not the poem is good

In midnight dreams of madness
I rest my thoughts on you
The chaos begins to falter
And all bad fades

In day dream state of mind
I wonder how we've made it this far
You've got me in your palms
Hold my heart tenderly

In my midnight dreams of madness
As we lay in separate lives
You've held my heart to yours
Love is such a complex thing
Just remember who I am in the morning

why wouldn't he remember her?

i think itr would be good if you put "we lay in our seprate lives holding my heart to yours.." something like that but if not the poem is good

no, that's the best line.

I had some sort of idea that while I was dreaming of her, she dreams of me.

Like a dream within a dream within a dream. does that make sense?

I had some sort of idea that while I was dreaming of her, she dreams of me.

Like a dream within a dream within a dream. does that make sense?

shit, then it's good.

xD lol