ok it doesnt have a beggining or an end but its the middle

You are the bluebery to my pie
the ground to my sky

you are the forest to my feild
the stop to my yeild

your the god of my church
the bird of my perch

your my clothes to my closet
the lake to my deposit

your the money to my bank
the army to my tank

Your the happy to my sad
and the good to my bad

your the music to my song
your the rite to my wrong




just tell if its good

i no

i suck at poetry

but i have to turn it in so i need other ppls opinion
it had to be in this pattern so o well
just tell me if u like it:rolleyes:

I really do like it. And if you have read some of my comments to other poetry in here, I am not the easiest person to please, so count that a complement!

But it is really refreshing to see something that isn't about slicing your arms into noodles... even if it is kind of silly (but in a good way...) I like that it is a different take on life... props to you.

GREAT!!

it looks like it came naturally, not that you just looked up rhyming words and put it together,

it looks effortless, and yet amazing.

very nice. sure to get you an A+!!!

it's good. Cute. However, 'your' should be "you're" ("you are")

lol...its a rough draft^^

HHHHHMMMMM the blueberry pie part made me hungry so i had to fix myself some brownies
yummmmmmy they're chewy

HHHHHMMMMM the blueberry pie part made me hungry so i had to fix myself some brownies
yummmmmmy they're chewy

lol