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theicyrose
05-29-2007, 01:06 AM
Don't Give up, Don't give in.
You'll never be alone, we'll continue to stand.
When you feel like giving up, begin again.
I'll stand by you..I'll hold your hand.

You can't fall when I'm your wings.
I couldn't live without you here to guide me.
You're words make my very heart sing.
When I'm blind, you help me to see.

You guard me and guide me.
You're always standing beside me.
I've never felt safer than I do with you.
Without your trust, I don't know what I'd do.

You make me laugh when I'm down.
You can turn all my tears to smiles,
Soothe away my deepest Fears.
And hug away every frown.

Out of everyone I've ever met,
You are my only hero..

robert_mnsn
05-29-2007, 11:57 AM
not bad, not bad at all

CrazyNicole
05-30-2007, 10:44 AM
oh that was awesome i encourage you to try to write even longer poems you have a very gothic type style to your writing even though it was kinda short it showed some very great potential

sweet_girl-28
05-30-2007, 02:48 PM
that was great keep writing:)

theicyrose
05-30-2007, 09:00 PM
Thank you ^_^

bl4d3
05-31-2007, 01:28 AM
Very nice.

There's definitely some potential there, keep writing.

theicyrose
06-01-2007, 10:21 PM
Thanks!

MS_2_SEXY
06-02-2007, 10:55 AM
I loved it it made my feel like i'm a hero to someone i really enjoyed it it was beautiful

MS_2_SEXY
06-02-2007, 10:56 AM
great job on my hero poem i lked it alot keep the work up

theicyrose
06-02-2007, 07:18 PM
Thank you !

alexander2910
06-02-2007, 07:23 PM
Thank goodness its copyrighted.

BooJoo
06-02-2007, 11:14 PM
I thought it was boring.

There wasn't any powerful images or metaphors, which are necessary in poetry. It's a sweet thing to write for a specific person...but copyrighting it seems unwarranted.