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cor
04-21-2007, 04:10 PM
so i can't figure out how to finish my poem, any ideas?? help would be really appreciated...

here's the poem:

SKYDIVING WITH A POT

So I'm skydiving with a pot,
Up here it's not very hot.
It's actually rather cool,
Like me, yeah I'm a tool.

So I'm still clinging to my pot,
As I decend it's still not hot.
The journey is coming to an end,
Oh look! I see a penthouse of my friend!

So now I pull the string,
And out comes the parachute thing.
It herked me arround alot,
So much I lost my pot!

So I see it hit the ground,
But I don't hear a sound....

cor
04-21-2007, 04:30 PM
well nvm.... it ended like this =

I see it hit the ground,
But I don't hear a sound.
With all that broken glass,
It must've had a heavy mass.

So my time is winding down,
As I plumet to the ground.
I'm glad you came on my treck,
I was scared it was gonna go to heck!

BlindWillieMctell
04-21-2007, 09:35 PM
Finish it by making it not suck. that is one of the dumbest poems ive ever read.