Dad I know you were never there
Never there when I was growing up
I heard all my friends brag about their dads
I know you were making a living for me.

I was depressed because you were never there
There is story written on my skin
A story that will never disappear
Its a story that will live on.

But now you don't want me in your life
I don't understand how you can do that
Now all I can do is strife
Pounder in all my pain.

All I can do is cry tears of blood
Blood that comes from a broken heart
I thought you loved me
I thought that you cared
But now I see you don't.

How could you do that to me
I was always there for you no matter what
I was the one who understood you
How can you throw that all away.

You saw the scars from all my pain
You saw the story on my skin that will never fade
That story will never end
That story will continued to be written.

Can't you see all the pain that I have
Dad I will never forget the past
But I will never forget the pain that you've caused me
Because its in my skin.

This is a story that will live on in my eyes
It will live on in the eyes of many
One last thing I have to say is
Dad I love you and don't ever fucking forget that.

damn that is powerful wow

thnks

wow. just, wow.

a good wow or bad wow? lol

a good wow

great poem,very powerful

thanks i appreciate that

I got tingles from just reading that, this poem is full of emotions. All i can hope for is that one day he may read this and perhaps understand a little of the pain hes caused you.

One Day He Will Understand...Till Then Look After Yourself For Me k?
<3<3 Love Love Hun <3<3

XxChrisxX

wow, that was so good. i dont even really know what to say. but good job. it was really sad though :(

thnks i appreciate it guys, Chris u kno i will

bump

omg that made me cry...some parts remind me of my dad :cry:

aww im srry

Good job, It's very heart-felt

One thing, but it's not THAT bad, it just sorta...stuck out to me how many times you mentioned it was in your skin.

yea i kno i didnt really realize that til after i posted and people commented, but thnks

bump

I wasn't too keen on it. I don't want to make it seem like I don't care for the idea as it obviously must be quite a strong personal and emotional theme for you. However I just didn't feel it was very well written, for one thing strife is a noun not a verb, and I felt the use of 'fucking' at the end was a redundant way to send across your feelings. I felt you kept uncomfortably slipping between the metaphor of the story and the 'talking' to your dad. It just didn't flow well with me.

ok thnks

bump...

isn't this like a good charlotte song?

no...not that i kno of

I wasn't too keen on it. I don't want to make it seem like I don't care for the idea as it obviously must be quite a strong personal and emotional theme for you. However I just didn't feel it was very well written, for one thing strife is a noun not a verb, and I felt the use of 'fucking' at the end was a redundant way to send across your feelings. I felt you kept uncomfortably slipping between the metaphor of the story and the 'talking' to your dad. It just didn't flow well with me.

ok...thnks

Dad I know you were never there
Never there when I was growing up
I heard all my friends brag about their dads
I know you were making a living for me.

I was depressed because you were never there
There is story written on my skin
A story that will never disappear
Its a story that will live on.

But now you don't want me in your life
I don't understand how you can do that
Now all I can do is strife
Pounder in all my pain.

All I can do is cry tears of blood
Blood that comes from a broken heart
I thought you loved me
I thought that you cared
But now I see you don't.

How could you do that to me
I was always there for you no matter what
I was the one who understood you
How can you throw that all away.

You saw the scars from all my pain
You saw the story on my skin that will never fade
That story will never end
That story will continued to be written.

Can't you see all the pain that I have
Dad I will never forget the past
But I will never forget the pain that you've caused me
Because its in my skin.

This is a story that will live on in my eyes
It will live on in the eyes of many
One last thing I have to say is
Dad I love you and don't ever fucking forget that.

so strong and bold, luved it

thnk u :)

thnk u :)

course!! <33

:D

bump

?

i dont kno lol

thats some (good) powerfull shit!

thnks

Technically this is awful. Personally it didn't emote me, however it does capture what many in our generation go through and give them something to relate too. I don't see it as a piece of poetic art but instead something that can help others feel less alone, which is just as valid, if not more important. Well done.

thnks