Drowning in the blur
no use looking for her
trapped below the view
abandoned on their cue

thought i was miles ahead
then discovered i was so far behind
did i miss something
or am i just this blind?

nothing can stop me
i'm untouchable now
X2

nothing can see me
i'm invisible now
X1

feedback?
and a possible title?

I reaallly like this poem!!! Very good!! a possible title name could be untouchable? maybe? lol just a suggestion!

yeah that sounds good
thanks man

if its a song ... which im guessing it is due to the 'X1 / X2' its a little short ...

if its a song ... which im guessing it is due to the 'X1 / X2' its a little short ...
yeah, i'm not quite done, i was just looking for feedback before i busted my ass finishing it

why dont you bust your ass and finish it regardless of what people think ?

why dont you bust your ass and finish it regardless of what people think ?
haha, you badass ;)
unlike most songs i write, i wasn't too sure about this one, i was skeptical