An article to the inferior,
For the stain I left on the interior.
An apology for my behavior,
You are like my savior, when I use you.
he pulls and twists,
he uses his wrist.
he loves this gratification
Its better then a physical relationship
he can alter and bend.
Sometimes, a little pain he sends,
but its ok, its all for the better.
he will never have to wait and worry for it to get wetter.
Just a quick dap of lotion,
and a few minutes of up and down motion.
This little man, just like him.
He wishes he could stop,
but he love to make it pop.
Its an addiction,
a mental affliction,
a sadistic condition.
He feels like a pervert,
always such an invert.
If only he could let it go,
but he thinks of all the women who are his foe.
The thoughts and feelings that enter his head,
the actions he takes in his mind,
he fears one day he may actually carry them out,
but not in his mind.
Then he decided, to solve this problem,
one last look at the sun, one last breath of fresh air,
then he took his gun,
the sting of the metal on his tongue,
and he no longer had to worry.

Its about a man who is addicted to masturbating to very bizarre thoughts of women he meets during the day, and is afraid that someday he will actually carry out the ideas he uses for masturbation and decides it is better to die then let himself tangibly defile a women in s manner that he does in his head.

I love it. Beautifuly written.

Thanks, I wasn't expecting that.

well it's to be expected. that is well written. you don't find most of that on here.

Thats true, I'm just now starting to write again, I haven't in years and I feel a little rusty.

Well you have gotten off to a great start

You should write more, I read some of your stuff and it was really good too.

um...Thanks. I diden't know it was still on here.

Its an addiction,
a mental affliction,
a sadistic condition.

that was the best bit.

you didnt really need the explaination though ...

I love it and I'm not bias. You are ten times better than certain published "writers".

^ i must agree with that.

the standard of some of the peoples writing on here who claim to be published ...

sheesh.

Thanks, the standards on here are pretty low, if we could criticize a little stronger maybe those standards would go up.

very original i have to say.

the subject of sex, i think, allows you to be more flexible with your rhyming. so it didnt bother me too much

I need to write more.

God how things were so much better when I wrote this.

I liked it, fluctuating rhyme scheme, good rhythym, it reminds me of a good hip hop song.

if we could criticize a little stronger maybe those standards would go up.


Been attempting to lately.

I liked it, fluctuating rhyme scheme, good rhythym, it reminds me of a good hip hop song.



Been attempting to lately.
Thanks, lets just hope to god I don't try to free style it.

i loved it ur an awesome writer why did u quit the 1st time?

i loved it ur an awesome writer why did u quit the 1st time?
I really don't know why I quit, I love to write, but one day I just stopped.

yea..very well written...i share ur passion..for writing..uve don 2 very good things..uve written the poem well and used a very gripping topic aswell...i mean..nobody writes a poem on masturbation everyday..although im quite frankly tired of ppl killing themselves at the end of the poem lol

yea..very well written...i share ur passion..for writing..uve don 2 very good things..uve written the poem well and used a very gripping topic aswell...i mean..nobody writes a poem on masturbation everyday..although im quite frankly tired of ppl killing themselves at the end of the poem lol
Normaly I would not throw in a suicide ending, because emo literature has killed that, but I figured in this poem it would be appropriate for him to solve his problem. Thanks for the feedback.