The Girl
She feels so alone in the world,
never has she been wanted,
acception is what she longs for,
someone to say they care.
Screams seep through the walls,
objects smash on the solid floors,
crys fill the empty night,
finally she hears the slam of doors.
It's all over untill the next,
she silently crys herself to sleep,
nobody else knows of this,
they don't see her weep.

Does ne1 have an oppinion?

It's okay, the flow of the poem wasn't really that great though.

I do, but I'm not sure you'll like it. Acception isn't a word, you spelt "cries" wrongly and the whole thing was filled with clichés. Poetry is about more than just emotion, like Brittney said - the flow wasn't all that great at all.

oopz didn't even notice the spelling error lol. It's not even my poem lol, it's my cousins. She ask me to post it and see what ppl would say. I typed it up off the paper she gave me in kind of a hurry, I have one of my own i'll post soon as I finish it. Thanx for the oppinions tho!

Its pretty good, like they said the flow could be better though