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origamikitty
05-16-2004, 07:24 PM
"Dear Diary"

"We all have our own great expectations,
Those big dreams and giant aspirations.
We hope to grow into what we set out to be.
We hope we never come to find true tragedy.
It won't be me that dies in a wreck at seventeen.
It won't be me that drinks from an alcohol-filled canteen.
Perhaps I will go to Harvard, maybe Yale.
It is preposterous to believe I will ever fail."
I sit down my diary from when I was eight.
Only to realize I am that person I hate.
When did it happen, how can I survive?
Knowing I don't deserve the right to be alive.
I thought I had all a person could ever hope for or dream,
But these drugs have made me so sick I wish I could scream.
I am eighteen today and am missing my prom,
I turned eighteen today, yet still live with my mom.
There is no way I can support this baby.
What was I thinking? I must be crazy.
I have no job, no high school degree.
Nobody will ever want to higher me.
For the sake of my child, and maybe myself,
I will bring pain upon me; end the rest of my health.
The migraines are still here and bursting my head.
I think this is for the best. I shall soon be dead.

origamikitty
05-16-2004, 07:26 PM
Originally posted by origamikitty
I have no job, no high school degree.
Nobody will ever want to higher me.


That is supposed to be "Nobody will ever want to hire me."

origamikitty
05-17-2004, 05:38 PM
fa la la... anyone?

origamikitty
05-18-2004, 08:22 PM
lol. Is it that bad?

buttrflykisses06
05-23-2004, 01:34 PM
not bad, depressing

Scarred Emotions
05-23-2004, 01:42 PM
That's really well written...are you going through that?

origamikitty
06-17-2004, 03:24 AM
No, I'm not going through it.. We were discussing Dicken's Great Expectations in class and I thought "hey.. aspirations goes well with that.." and it just went from there.

CellarDoor7
06-17-2004, 06:44 AM
I like it, the emotion is alright...but it's lacking something. I'd say it's probably just that the reader isn't left with any hope. Not bad though.

Petite_danseur
06-17-2004, 11:24 AM
*Sigh* I really do not know wht to say. it was good, you have promise, but it seemed a little forced, the emotion wasnt expressed that deeply so it was hard for me to relate.

origamikitty
06-21-2004, 09:49 PM
Thanks for the reviews:)