This is a couple months old but I still like it and think I did a good job on it, let me know what you think.

Ive been knocked down to many times
told by others that Im a whore and bitch
told that im useless, "no guy will ever want you"
Been jeered at "Dracula", "Thou shalt not suffer a witch to live"
Ive been told this so many times...
To many times so ive come to believe it myself
Ive tried to put up a wall of resistance
But under to much water, any dam can break
It hurts to admit their right
But havent I believed it all along?
Ive burried myself under so much self-doubt
worrying that the only life Ill lead is that of a tramp,
living my life from man to man
for who would ever truly care?
Without a family.. afterall I live a life of sin,
Far to filthy to be a daughter or sister
Afraid that Im going to be living off the streets
Their are so many more smart and talented people out their...
Im trying to stay afloat in this ocean of self-doubts
but with every water-stained breath I take...
I find it harder not to fall to the bottom

please someone reply, what do you think ofit?> is it that bad?

i dont know what to think of it im not one to judge

Bleh, you got some ideas.. just the style is predictable. And it sounds more like rap lyrics than a poem. But yeh, the angst/pain/worry thing is good if it's expressed in an interesting way. (I'm not saying this hasn't been writen without any feeling).

i dont know what to think of it im not one to judge
what a stupid thing to say