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never_good_enough
09-30-2006, 11:45 PM
So yeah. I found this in an old notebook today.
I wrote in 6th grade I think.
Im pretty sure it's the first poem Ive ever written.
Im curious to know if it sucks.
swim in a river
a river of tears
shes drowning in sorrow
and sinking in fears
she sees you
as your passing bye
she knows you dont care
youd rather she die
running out of air
shes so unprepared
she closes her eyes
waiting to die
shes done with your lies
she wants to be done with her life
nani25
10-01-2006, 01:11 AM
dosent really suck to be written in the sixth grade. u shoulda seen my first one
rhetoric_a
10-02-2006, 12:45 PM
that very depressing. if you really wrote this in the 6th grade, then impressive. but if you're just saying that to 'add to the effect'... i hate it.
my-chemical-emotion
10-02-2006, 12:51 PM
how old are you if your in 6th grade ?
rhetoric_a
10-02-2006, 01:14 PM
11
my-chemical-emotion
10-02-2006, 01:17 PM
its a bit advanced for an 11 y/o ..
but good
rhetoric_a
10-02-2006, 01:19 PM
its a bit advanced for an 11 y/o ..
but good
I didn't write this.
But yes, I agree.
never_good_enough
10-02-2006, 03:17 PM
that very depressing. if you really wrote this in the 6th grade, then impressive. but if you're just saying that to 'add to the effect'... i hate it.
no no, i really did do it in 6th.
how old are you if your in 6th grade ?
normally 11, but i was 12 because i was held back in 1st.
its a bit advanced for an 11 y/o ..
but good
yay im advanced!! :)
dotie
10-02-2006, 04:17 PM
Grammer needs some help, but for sixth grade that's pretty spiffy.
never_good_enough
10-02-2006, 04:20 PM
Grammer needs some help, but for sixth grade that's pretty spiffy.
you stole my word.
THEIF!
haha.
dotie
10-02-2006, 04:57 PM
you stole my word.
THEIF!
haha.
:tears: i'm sorry. Can you ever forgive me?
never_good_enough
10-02-2006, 06:19 PM
i s'pose so.
hah.
roxy8995
10-02-2006, 06:43 PM
i think its pretty good:)
The_Lost_Failure
10-02-2006, 08:20 PM
I love it.