my-chemical-emotion
09-30-2006, 12:14 PM
very very good.
A simple white Victorian house
Fading paint holding up the base of the house
Almost as if one slight wind could tumble it over
i didnt like that bit though (in bold) if didnt seem "right"
goodguy
09-30-2006, 12:16 PM
i actually have been working on that part, lol. i agree ther, the repetition doesnt flow very well ther at all so im going to fix it
Fixed, i like the line better, but eh i may change again.
ZeppelinKitty
10-02-2006, 12:37 AM
why the hell did you delete it?
i was just digging around to find it. :angry: