i wrote this when i was really depressed...luckily my poems are happy now...let me know what u think

i've lost all hope
i want to choke
the life out of me,
to silently scream loudly
to a world that never wanted me.
i want them to see
the pain and suffering they've caused me.
slowly i'll suck away my last breath
and slip into a sea of unconciousness.
hoping someone will save me from me,
but knowing no one will so silently i'll scream.
i can't wake up, this is not a dream....
this is my reality.

to silently scream loudly - bad contradiction.

and slip into a sea of unconciousness - good line.

That's so sad. I hpoe that you don't feel that way anymore.

As a poem I like it. I can tell that this was probably a hard thing to write. So sad.

^^ thanks...it was