this is my song called 'Daily Dose'
and constructive critisism for future writing? Im always looking to improve.


is this really a cure,
to this disease that we have carried?
or is it the blashempy,
leaving you weary?
whatever this is, its killing you.
so beautifully you dont even notice
so blissful you cant focus.

so swallow your daily dose of gasoline,
this is my toast to you.
i bid thee farewell,
may the smell of your own bitterness
remind you of your little fits
and this heartbreak you cant miss
is this it? is this it?
is this what you wanted?
then go ahead, try to reverse the tears weve all shed.

theres a tear in your eye
your beginning to realize
its hurting you but killing me
thats your poinson isnt setting you free
but that you are its slave.
to something insides,
something that needs to die

so swallow your daily dose of gasoline,
this is my toast to you.
i bid thee farewell,
may the smell of your own bitterness
remind you of your little fits
and this heartbreak you cant miss
is this it? is this it?
is this what you wanted?
then go ahead, try to reverse the tears weve all shed.

dieing now, lying now, crying now.
alone, afraid to go home.
i dont want to see you like that again
afraid to feel that again
the hell that will never end

so swallow your daily dose of gasoline,
this is my toast to you.
i bid thee farewell,
may the smell of your own bitterness
remind you of your little fits
and this heartbreak you cant miss
is this it? is this it?
is this what you wanted?
then go ahead, try to reverse the tears weve all shed.

That was touching. I could just feel your pain as I read this. Good job.

Yes, very well written.

Thank you.

You're welcome