hi! im julie. i wrote this poem a while ago and iwas hopin to get sum comments about it. :) it would help alot. thx
I Can't Go On Without You, Baby
As I stand here,
In the middle of the street,
I try to say good-bye,
But all I could do is cry
And kiss you one last time.

Once upon a time,
We were the "perfect" couple,
But now we realize that
Things change;
People change.

So now we go our separate ways,
You- your alley
And me- my lane,
Until fate may bring us together again.

If I had a single wish,
I'd go back to the moment I kissed you good-bye.

Cuz no matter how hard I try,
I can't go on without you, baby.

As I stand here,
Watching you walk away,
My eyes start to water,
And one by one the tears start to fall-
Knowing that you'd never come back,
And yet still hoping that you would.

As raindrop after raindrop fell on my cheek,
My face starts to get wet,
Covering the ocean of tears I cried.

With all my dreams shattered,
And my heart and soul broken,
I finally understand what it is like
For the world to collapse over me.

As I stand here,
Watching you disappear,
I think about all the times
We've been through:
The good ones,
The bad ones,
The joyful ones
And the sad ones.

If I had a singe wish,
I'd go back to the moment I kissed you good-bye.

Cuz no matter how hard I try,
I can't go on without you, baby.

awwww i love it keep up the great work

*sniff* tha...that wuz beautiful *sniff*

Was pretty good. I liked it.

As raindrop after raindrop fell on my cheek,
My face starts to get wet,
Covering the ocean of tears I cried.
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was good except for that stanza, it just ... didnt do anything for me.

wow!it has passion. keep it up.