Hey guys i made this up last night i hope u guys like it. =)

The waves gently overlap the sand
They flow just short of where she stands
The ocean breeze blows through her light brown hair
As she stands on the shore and enjoys the warm air

She walks slowly with no place to go
A young man wastes no time to say Hello
She looks at him deeply into his eyes
He grabs her hand and they gaze at the sky

The sunset is beautiful its just about done
They say goodbye to the bright and warm sun
Hand in hand they walk along the rocky ocean shore
She looked so wonderful he could not resist anymore

He turned to her and placed his hands on her hips
Then romantically closed the gap between their lips
Such a small and short, but passionate kiss
She wonders if shes just imagining this

Theres something about the ocean breeze
Thats enough to bring one to his knees
Love is rekindled and love is found
On the soft and sandy, ocean shore ground

:) i like it... it's really cute! there are just a couple verb tenses that are always changing... from what I understood you're supposed to try and keep them the same.. but other than that, i could picture the whole poem well:)

Awww thx =)

the rhyme scheme is really starting to hold back your greatness. i love your writing, it is great, but could be much better without forcing yourself to rhyme every line. i lvoe the word useage here, you give wonderful detail and marvelous setting and i see it in my mind. wonderful job.

aww thx good guy =) hope to talk to u soon

awesome poem i really liked it :cutie:

nice poem VERY breezy nice poem.

peace