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The_Guardian
06-24-2006, 10:53 PM
His touch sends chills up my spine; I shiver and stare at the screen which provides light source.
I want to make him want me; I want him to know I need him.
A small click and I tell him what I crave.
I place my fingers between my legs and moan as I feel him stroke me the way he does.
We stare at each other for hours, so long it hurts, but I know that if I stop he’ll disappear.
And I don’t want that to happen.
His hand running over my chest, I feel myself standing on the edge of destructive pleasure.
He tells me of his love and wishes of sacrifice, our love grows a little each day, undying love expressed in simplistic tortures.
Nobody sees what I see in him, and no one could picture what he finds in me, and that’s the way I like it.
Caresses from miles away send me into pure bliss, I can’t feel anything but his loving touch, so close it comes from inside.
It engulfs me like a river, overflowing, it’s current so strong the only thing to do is let it take you.
For we are young lovers, for whom nothing will die.
He is my Romeo, I am his Juliet.
I am his Ophelia, He, my Hamlet.
He masquerades as my Mark Anthony, as I pose as his Cleopatra.
For he is my Christian, and I am his Satine.
Tom, I love you, with all my heart, soul and mind.
Till death do we part, this is the tale of two young lovers.

kingcobra42
06-24-2006, 11:40 PM
I'm sorry but.... god damnit pick a select few of your poems or put them all in one thread instead of crowding up the whole goddamn board with every fuckin poem you have!

The_Guardian
06-25-2006, 12:13 AM
ok, thanx

Sudden
06-25-2006, 07:59 AM
It's a beautiful poem, it creates strong images and evokes feelings. some of the rythym i would tweak and a little bit of the repetive use of some words too close together subverts the flow. but overall, good work, a joy to read.

and to the guy above... each poem should get its own thread, IMHO. it makes it easier to find them. its not "clutter"

evelyn01
06-25-2006, 08:54 AM
cool poem
i really did like it
;)

The_Guardian
06-25-2006, 09:27 AM
Thanx, yeah i guess so, i mean i did it cause i saw everyone else doing it and i thought that was the 'drill' lol, thanx

evelyn01
06-25-2006, 09:29 AM
ur welcome :cutie:

The_Guardian
06-25-2006, 10:57 AM
hehe

abadi
06-25-2006, 05:32 PM
is this a poem or a script from a freaking **** scence? like seriously

peace.

The_Guardian
06-26-2006, 12:57 AM
Ha!