From Lies to Rumors to the Truth


No lies hereforth exist
In this land of purity,
Yet so many so little maturity,
The land so unpure,
But none they can tell
As their immaturity hinders,
Their ability to be civil
And speak the truth,
But nobody will -
Nobody can,
The lies they tell soon rumor,
The rumors they spread soon truth,
But these truths are nothing but a perception,
As one can only perceive a one sided story true,
Yet the otherside still lies untold -
Another truth unheard,
Another lie,
Another rumor,
Yet only one -
Truth.

Constructive criticism anyone?

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I thought it was real good, I dont really have any criticism. But yea, I really liked it.

Doubble post, ignore.

Interesting, but not necessarily poetic. Train of thought, but not necessarily cohesive or productive.

I think it's a good start, keep working.


I'm just going to echo ZeppelinKitty's comments from someone else's poem. I think it applies to yours.

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