Shouldnt Be- Jan. '04"

U touch me once, I kick you twice,
U move closer, I push you farther,
Youre on top of me, I move to get free.
Your breath is strong
I reconize the alcohol
YOur hands make me sick inside
I just want to escape and cry.
This isnt right, you know it too
Get your nasty ass off me
Let me free, Let me be
Let me let go of the feelings you have given me
This isnt right, It just shouldnt be.


Untitled-'04"

Sometimes I think of how to say good bye,
Id kiss your lips
And tell you I can no longer take this,
Youd begin to cry,
Id hold you tight
Whisper Im sorry with tears forming in my eyes.

Shouldnt Be- Jan. '04"

U touch me once, I kick you twice,
U move closer, I push you farther,
Youre on top of me, I move to get free.
Your breath is strong
I reconize the alcohol
YOur hands make me sick inside
I just want to escape and cry.
This isnt right, you know it too
Get your nasty ass off me
Let me free, Let me be
Let me let go of the feelings you have given me
This isnt right, It just shouldnt be.


Untitled-'04"

Sometimes I think of how to say good bye,
Id kiss your lips
And tell you I can no longer take this,
Youd begin to cry,
Id hold you tight
Whisper Im sorry with tears forming in my eyes.

the first ones ok but the second one altho its short is actually very touchin my eyes were goin lol :cry:

I think there both good. :rolleyes: The first one seems to get to raw. And yes the second on is the bettter one, very touching. Good work!

Both of the poems were good and the second 1 was very touching and deep