CAUTION
Warning: do not read this poem
on acid,
or while making love,
or while pregnant,
or while choking,
or if you’ve served your country,
or if you read time magazine,
believe in racism
and the slow train death of our angelic mother.
With high blood pressure, or depressed
either way there isn’t anything here for you.

Keep this poem
out of the reach of children.
Its contents have the power
to harm.
Mack Carter

corny? maybe you could have done something with it to talk about free speech or the pursual of art, but it's just...there.

"Its contents have the power
to harm." -- except they don't.

good point

i re-read this one when i wasnt high and it turns out it makes sense, its showing all the things for kids not to be, and if they get it in their hands and be those things it would in fact cause harm. oh and heres the final version.

CAUTION
Warning: do not read this poem
on acid,
or while making love,
or while pregnant,
or if you’ve killed,
or if you’ve served your country,
or if you read time magazine,
believe in racism
and the slow train death of our angelic mother.
With high blood pressure, or depressed
either way there isn’t anything here for you.

Keep this poem
out of the reach of children.
Its contents have the power
to harm.

okay no wait, this is the last one, i sware.


CAUTION
Warning: do not read this poem
on LSD,
or while making love,
or while praying,
or if you’ve killed,
or if you’ve served your country,
or if you read time magazine,
believe in racism
and the slow train death of our angelic mother.
With high blood pressure, or depressed
either way there isn’t anything here for you.

Keep this poem
out of the reach of children.
It warps the mind
into every other human being.

... beating a dead horse

You have a good idea here; a poem warning label. It needs a bit of work. Maybe starting afresh with a clean slate and the idea in mind. But as it is it's a little... not so nice. Just my honest opinion.

what does not so nice mean? like bad? or what hmm? maybe i should write about the blimp