Unwise eyesI have seen the eyes of the unwise
These unwise eyes keep telling my lies
That keep hypnotize and mesmorized
Tongue tied, not coming to my senses
That's when I've come to realize
That through all the stories and lies that takes over our minds
That these same unwise eyes were very wise

Whats tong tied? or is it thong tied? or tongue tied?

There's something I like about it :/ The rhyme was too heavy, but for some reason the repetition of "unwise" worked in a hypnotic way.

i think its good things dont allways have to make since to be good.

my english teacher allways ruins everything by trying to make us find the point of it all and there dosent always have to be a poit that the readers see

its good keep it up

i thought that it was good i also dont know what it is about that poem but i like it i think that you did realy good on it keep it up

interesting

woohoo 1,000 posts!lol