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SxYrOcKeRcHiC666
11-26-2005, 01:58 AM
Mother?
Mother where are you?
Where did you go?
You left me here all alone in this world to fight for myself
What happen to you?
Do you love me?
Mother? Mother? Mother?
Answer me!
Or are you ignoring me like you have done so far most of my life
Do you even give a damn that you’re wasting away ?
Do you know why you’re doing this or is it just some game to get some attention?
Why won’t you answer me?
Just sit there with a blank stare with no movement or emotion at all
Is there any life in you at all
How can you do this to us?
Why the go to hell looks?
Mother do you not care about me or any of us?
Mother can you tell the pain that you caused me ?
The hell that you put me through?
I wonder constantly why you do this
Why? Why? Why?
As I sit in my room wondering everyday if anything will ever be the same
I question myself what did I do to deserve this ?
Did I do something to make you this way?
Tell me! Tell me is all I ask you do .

AuraBell
11-26-2005, 07:55 AM
o.o

Emotive, some good use of rhetorical questions in there. The repetition of the words 'Mother' and 'Why' don't have to all be in the same sentence by the way. Just thought to let you know. All in all, not bad at all. The 'Tell me is all I ask you to do.' should be on a seperate line for emphasis perhaps.

my-chemical-emotion
11-26-2005, 02:56 PM
niice